from what i can tell, you are trying to go for the chill ibiza house edm kinda vibe which i love, but i feel like with that, you need the kind of climax which would take it to the next level. so my idea was first of all I feel like measures 5 and 6 should be doubled bc as of now the beat drop feels a little premature. also, try taking out the kick drum at measure 9 thru 16. just try it out and tell me what you think, I think it'll open up more room to let everyone wait for the full efect of the hi hat at t