This sequence seems good to me in general but there are some details that could be corrected, for example: the sound of the guitar (a little more reberb), the use of detune would make many parts sound better, there is also some part at the beginning that It doesn't sound very consistent with the original and in parts 11 to part 15 the drum sounds very loud. I am currently doing Cliffs of Dover with the errors corrected although it is not finished yet, I am halfway there.