06-06-2015, 11:13 PM
(06-06-2015, 03:32 PM)DaConnor Wrote: I made another thing, called Eszence.
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changed your sequence a bit
and here's my 2 cents
1. The series of descending notes (D-C#-B-A-F#-E) is cool, but its placement throughout the song seemed inconsistent
I changed them to occur at the last 16th note of the first beat of whatever measure they were in to begin with (if this confusing sentence makes no sense to you just listen to the song)
2. The song overall feels disorganized, and the ending is abrupt
If you listen to pretty much any song, you'll notice that they tend to be divided into "phrases" that are 4 measures long, with each "phrase" having a distinct feel to it. This is mostly intuitive so I probably can't explain it any better than this ;)
The song sounds messy because there isn't any obvious division of these phrases, so I changed the chord progression after 4 measures to make the division more apparent
Also, the song is only 7 measures long (excluding the intro), making the last phrase only 3 measures long, hence the abruptness
3. Some rhythms were too irregular
ye just listen to the song it sounds better now
HEY THIS IS DC LET ME KNOW IF YOU'RE HERE I MISS YOU DUDE 
bruh how did you even get my pw
HEY THIS IS LUCENT IDK WHO YOU ARE BUT LET ME KNOW IF YOURE HERE I MISS YOU TOO

bruh how did you even get my pw

HEY THIS IS LUCENT IDK WHO YOU ARE BUT LET ME KNOW IF YOURE HERE I MISS YOU TOO