Song/Collab/Review Megathread (For all)

[Jonah]

Hello, I have two songs that I would like some feedback upon;

[url=][/url] and [url=][/url].

I only have a basic understanding of composition, so any feedback is welcome. Also keep in mind that while the first piece is an original, the second is not.

Thanks in advance!

Sorry for the late response.

I think the first one was good. The second one gave off a kinda too long; didn't listen vibe though. I think the first one sounds more like a song that would have a lot of instrument variety rather than just piano. Percussion at the beat would work well too. I think the first one shows potential.

[Eric]

I'd like a review on something I don't do very often.
So I created a song that already exists, but i love the song so much that i absolutely just had to make it here.

I don't want unoriginal creations to be posted in my thread, and i'm unsure if I should make a thread dedicated to unoriginal content alone.
I wouldn't make a thread dedicated to that because I don't create unoriginal content, like ever... (it's so rare to see me create something that already exists)
I used to do this a TON before I registered here because i remained anonymous

[Jonah]

I'd like a review on something I don't do very often.
So I created a song that already exists, but i love the song so much that i absolutely just had to make it here.

I don't want unoriginal creations to be posted in my thread, and i'm unsure if I should make a thread dedicated to unoriginal content alone.
I wouldn't make a thread dedicated to that because I don't create unoriginal content, like ever... (it's so rare to see me create something that already exists)
I used to do this a TON before I registered here because i remained anonymous

Just, for future preference, put a link to the original in your post pls. It's fine you didn't do it this time I know I didn't really say anything about it in the OP.

Anyway, I listened to the original and as far as I can tell it's pretty accurate. The big difference, caused by OS itself, is the sustain.
I'd recommend you find something to do about the sustain, because right now it just sounds weird and empty almost. Although, I don't know what you should do.
You could simply fill in the blanks with chords, you could just hit the key over and over again until it's not sustained anymore, you could even change them to synth pluck and put smooth synth after each note.
"People don't buy what you do, they buy why you do it" -Simon Sinek (Woah an actual quote)
I think you should make your own twist/edit to the song. Make it a remix rather than a remake. Your style of music is already fairly similar, so I don't think it'd be too difficult for you.

Conclusion: It is very accurate to the original, and if that was what you were going for, good. I think it would sound better, though, if you added your own twist to it.

[LucentTear]

I'd like to have an overview on this, please.

[url=][WIP] Reminiscent Of Nothing In Mind[/url]

Also a few notes to keep in mind, if this sequence sounds similar to anything you've heard before then that is intentional.
Future Luneric project to get in before Eric's birthday, just need a commentary before I get too far with progress.

[ctr34]

I'd like to have an overview on this, please.

[url=][WIP] Reminiscent Of Nothing In Mind[/url]

Also a few notes to keep in mind, if this sequence sounds similar to anything you've heard before then that is intentional.
Future Luneric project to get in before Eric's birthday, just need a commentary before I get too far with progress.

I think is very good! My favorite part is from the 39th thick gray bar onwards.

[wuggie]

I'd like to have an overview on this, please.

[url=][WIP] Reminiscent Of Nothing In Mind[/url]

Also a few notes to keep in mind, if this sequence sounds similar to anything you've heard before then that is intentional.
Future Luneric project to get in before Eric's birthday, just need a commentary before I get too far with progress.

I like the song overall. There are a few things that you may want to keep in mind, though. For my taste, personally, there are some portions of the song that have a little too much going on. The first measure of the song musically is fine. The problem I had was that it feels a little unexpected to start this kind of song with that many notes. I think that you could almost make the song more powerful/emotional if you trimmed that part down a bit. The same thing applies to measures 15-18; musically, again, it is fine. However, the notes spread almost seven octaves consistently for four measures, and sometimes it could feel a little overwhelming. The part after that, on the other, I loved. Measures 20-35 were seriously great, they fit in with the theme of the song, I understood what was happening, and it felt powerful and emotional. The rest of what you currently have is fine, but I think that when a lot of the lower notes are played, it makes the song sound a little muddy. I almost feel like some of those portions could be brought up an octave and sound fantastic. Finally, when you continue this song, I think it would be beneficial to repeat previous sections, maybe with some slight variations. Doing this would make the song as a more memorable, I personally like when a song comes back multiple times to something I heard earlier.

Please don't get me wrong, I know it seems like there is a lot of criticism in this post, but I genuinely believe that this is a good song. Considering that you posted it to this forum, I am just assuming you want as much constructive feedback as possible. Seriously-- good work, and you don't have to feel inclined to take any of my opinions to heart.

[Jonah]

I'd like to have an overview on this, please.

[url=][WIP] Reminiscent Of Nothing In Mind[/url]

Also a few notes to keep in mind, if this sequence sounds similar to anything you've heard before then that is intentional.
Future Luneric project to get in before Eric's birthday, just need a commentary before I get too far with progress.

Kinda just want to say it's trash, but I'll pretend this sequence is worth my ears for the sake of PR. (Still not really pulling punches though. Also not going to compliment you.)

First: Like Wuggie said, too many notes in one place. A good thing to remember is to stick to what is playable on the piano, especially for an all piano song. (10 notes max)
Second: I noticed this was sort of like a remake of Stars
Third: The 6th measure and all the places it repeats aren't very good.
Four: 18th to 19th measure transition kinda comes out of nowhere. It goes from a 7 to a 4 in an instant and then 3, 2 and 1.
Five: Measure 35 is out of place and terrible
Six: The ending is bad
Seven: You use dissonance throughout the song A LOT. I don't dislike dissonance, except when it's piano and it occurs every 2 seconds. It almost sounds sort of detuned. Not totally bad, but you do this in every song and it's getting old. You're still young, learn some new tricks to rely on while you can.

sidenote: 90% sure Lucent will come up with a rebuttal for every single point I just made.

[ctr34]

*knock* *knock*
Hi! Mmm... can i enter?
Ehm, i was reading the main post of this thread and i thought that i can post here one of my works. At least one of them, so i ll try. I dont know if this thread is closed but still i want to give a chance. I dont want to bother anyone. I just want you to give suggestions about my work: if the melody is bad, if i ve made some other mistakes, but the most important thing to me is the mixing quality (i.e. you hear some "sandy" sounds. I think this is called "overdrive").

More details of the song in the link. I m going to post this song in my thread later with more formality. If you liked the song and want to create something with those instruments, check here: https://onlinesequencer.net/forum/showth...34#pid4434 . With this said, ENJOY THE SONG :D !

ctr34 - Maelstrom Meets Tornado ~ Megalodon vs F-22:
Newgrounds (mp3): http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/737323

[GrumblePuppy]

Hey ctr34 I really liked your piece Maelstrom Meets Tornado. It's very dynamic and full of variety. Good job!

http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/737323

[GrumblePuppy]

Hello, I have two songs that I would like some feedback upon;

[url=][/url] and [url=][/url].

I only have a basic understanding of composition, so any feedback is welcome. Also keep in mind that while the first piece is an original, the second is not.

Thanks in advance!

Hi Swiwious. I liked both of your songs. Both are very clean. You might want to experiment with inserting some notes of different lengths and also adding some violin. But overall I think your songs show a good grasp of basic composition. Look forward to hearing more from you.