Song/Collab/Review Megathread (For all)

[Karsus]

I am the Dungeon Master for a table of Dungeons and Dragons, and I like to play music to set the mood for a battle or a tense situation.  I want to try composing my own music for this purpose.  The following sequence is meant for a widespread, chaotic battle event.  Could someone please give me some constructive criticism of my sequence?  Also, what instruments could I use to make the entrance more powerful?

[kailah baby]

i would like t do a colab pls private message me or reply to me

[Karsus]

i would like t do a colab pls private message me or reply to me

Where and when my guy?

[The Institute]

Could someone please give me some constructive criticism of my sequence? 

i very quickly did a remix, maybe you'll like some of the changes and can build on them:

##2062898

what i did:

- i think it's missing a lot of lower frequencies, so i added cello an octave lower, along with some bass pizzicato
- the triangle wave i think is meant to sound like a renaissance flute, and you might try mixing in some of the flute, i just lowered its volume and mixed in some quiet reverbed sine wave to give it more space and a bit more of a natural sound
- i like the cello line, i changed a few notes so it would sound like it's constantly moving
- i added cello to the end, based on your description, i think you might want to go for a big climax at the end, so i added some tense cello there, (it's just the earlier cello shifted down five steps), that could build to a final section that doesn't exist yet
- i didn't touch the drums, but it sounds like you might be going for snare rolls, and i'm not sure how easy those are to do on OS, i haven't tried

[Karsus]

Could someone please give me some constructive criticism of my sequence? 

i very quickly did a remix, maybe you'll like some of the changes and can build on them:

##2062898

what i did:

- i think it's missing a lot of lower frequencies, so i added cello an octave lower, along with some bass pizzicato
- the triangle wave i think is meant to sound like a renaissance flute, and you might try mixing in some of the flute, i just lowered its volume and mixed in some quiet reverbed sine wave to give it more space and a bit more of a natural sound
- i like the cello line, i changed a few notes so it would sound like it's constantly moving
- i added cello to the end, based on your description, i think you might want to go for a big climax at the end, so i added some tense cello there, (it's just the earlier cello shifted down five steps), that could build to a final section that doesn't exist yet
- i didn't touch the drums, but it sounds like you might be going for snare rolls, and i'm not sure how easy those are to do on OS, i haven't tried

Thank you so much!  I appreciate this.

[J50 Kirsame]

[AAAlex]

opinions so far? 

[Cool172]

opinions so far? 

I don't think this thread is going to get replies anymore, it would be more useful to post songs in chat instead

[cmusic]

testing

[cmusic]

feedback on my music?